Music is truly the universal language. Some people believe that it benefits society as a whole, whereas, others consider it as a simple way of entertaining people. As music has a proven effect on human relationships, I tend to believe the former viewpoint, however, the value of music in entertainment industry cannot be disregarded.
A piece of music has a marvelous ability to benefit humans individually and collectively. Especially, it aids in strengthening relationships. For instance, lullabies help developing secure attachment between parents and infants. Protest songs, likewise, stir a sense of shared purpose in marches. Another example is national anthems, which connect crowds at sporting events. In addition to uniting people, music brings countless health benefits, such as relieving stress, enhancing memory and lowering symptoms of depression. This is supported by a recent study conducted at Oxford University, in which they claim that symptoms of depression can completely be alleviated by regular music therapy sessions conducted by professional music therapists. Music, therefore, plays a vital role in society.
However, almost everyone experiences the role of music as a form of entertainment. Its potential, such as to switch ones focus, to make people relax and to give them joyful moments, proves the importance of listening to music as a hobby in leisure time. In addition to enjoying recorded music, live concerts are preferred by people, who find it a great way of relaxing. If you are looking for a new hobby, music should top your list as the health and wellness benefits are remarkable. Music is capable of raising states of consciousness, changing your mood, developing the brain, lowering stress levels and accessing different states of the mind. Making music your new hobby can heal your body and your soul, making you a happier, well-rounded person.
In conclusion, music, whereby almost everyone entertains themselves, offers a lot of merits to society as well, notably, strong human relationships and healthy nations in terms of mental, emotion and cognition.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 172, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to develop' or 'develop'.
Suggestion: to develop; develop
...tionships. For instance, lullabies help developing secure attachment between parents and i...
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Line 7, column 128, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rits to society as well, notably, strong human relationships and healthy nations ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, likewise, so, then, therefore, well, whereas, as to, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1465.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 264.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.54924242424 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12974845846 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.651515151515 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 461.7 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 56.9999610136 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.6666666667 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198712445459 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0617569489363 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0565758991855 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118301318619 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0436873465867 0.056905535591 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.61 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.94 8.58950901804 127% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.