Some people think that the only purpose of working hard is to earn money. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.
Earning money is assumed as the main purpose of working hard by several people. Although there are other advantages of slave, I do believe, the major reason of societies do it because survival needs currency.
Improving self-potency of human is another reason why every person has to work harder. They can recognize how talented they are, through doing some toils which are done truly by themselves, so that their new ability can be useful not only for their own lives but also for other people. It happened to one of indonesian figure, MissIndriyati, an unwell-known badminton athlete, at an interview, she admitted naively that her prime goal was finding her truly potency as she knew through exercise diligently, she was able to find her huge hidden talent that she had even not noticed. However every single hard working intend to survive by collecting currency as much as possible.
Indeed, collecting much money is primary desire for most workers while other aims. A couple of societies think that money has been the most crucial aspect in their lives, as it is a necessity as well as it is not easy to acquire it, so that work hardly should be undertaken by most of them. A poor labour having many children to school with, she has to work twofold harder than other better-lived people. In addition, she does not have any choice besides work away.
To summary, working hard has a couple of profits for humans lives where one of them is to find a new potential that probably people have not realized yet. However, I am personally believe that the other thing which become the main goal is money.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: However,
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Suggestion: believed
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, so, well, while, as to, in addition, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1328.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 278.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77697841727 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47605373304 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604316546763 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 426.6 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.34987231 49.4020404114 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.666666667 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1666666667 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18144299687 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0720320233237 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0603408123429 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121176824523 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0502483670667 0.056905535591 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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