While learning arts is a part of high school curriculum in a lot of countries, there is a viewpoint according to which teenagers do not need to spend their time on these subjects. In my opinion, I totally disagree with this statement, because I am of the view that arts play a vital role in the teenagers’ development for the reasons explained below.
Firstly, by learning how to draw and paint, high school students can nurture their aesthetic skills, which therefore can improve their critical emotion and thought. More specifically, learning arts assist pupils to develop holistically, and they give them the tool to improve their mental health. Without aesthetic skills, their life would be imbalance, and full of stress. Taking learning painting as an example, surveys have proved that painting helps students to relieve their stress, improve their self-esteem, and have more confidence in themselves.
Secondly, arts subjects enhance the students’ creative mindset, which is important in the future due to the fact that nobody can predict how things will change in the next years. Therefore, schools should treat arts just like literacy and numeracy. Unlike science subjects, arts can trigger the creative mindset of teenagers at a high level, and enlighten their professional paths, as students are not frightened that can be wrong in arts. As a result, students will have the capacity to come up with original ideas, and find solutions at problems from a diverse perspective. To illustrate this, although the majority of the most important poets in my country studied law in the university, followed an art career after that; Kavafis, Empirikos and others started as lawyers and end up with remarkable pieces of art.
In conclusion, in my opinion, schools should not underestimate the role of arts in the high school curriculum, since learning arts not only helps students to take care of their mental health, but also gives them alternatives in their professional future.
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1675.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 321.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21806853583 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78079222312 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.582554517134 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 494.1 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 0.809619238477 741% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.2694930414 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.583333333 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.75 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.33333333333 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129888465265 0.244688304435 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0508702424512 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0271012906348 0.0667982634062 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0800479651522 0.151304729494 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00516348492642 0.056905535591 9% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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