Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of the society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Many individuals believe that parents have huge responsibility to prepare their children to become great person in society. However, some people encourage their children going to school to learn social value. For this case, I will explain both of these views.
To begin with, parents are the first teacher for their children because they grow up and do many activities together at home. It means that from a baby to a adult, most of children spend their time with parents so they contribute excessively to improve children's social ability. For instance, based on my experience, my parents teach me to become open-minded and independent person. I have to tell everything to them, and struggle to reach what I admire. Besides, it is easy to control the activities of children because they just mostly interact to parents and siblings. I think it is the best way to avoid bullying in the society, especially in the school.
On the other hand, some people reveal that it is better to send children to school. Firstly, workaholic parents are able to focus to their job when the children study in the school. Moreover, society values such as responsibility, respect, togetherness can be completely gained in educational field because there are many different traits of people. Ultimately, children tend to enhance independent attitude as prominent modal to socialize in the wider real life because they grow apart from their parents.
To conclude, parents and school have advantages and disadvantages as place to improve children's soft skills to get involved in society, but for me, both of them can develop social values.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
to become great person in society
to become a great person in society
to become great persons in society
teach me to become open-minded and independent person
teach me to become an open-minded and independent person
flaws:
More sentences varieties wanted. Look, most sentences start with: 'people', 'parents', or pronouns like: 'I'
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 266 350
No. of Characters: 1318 1500
No. of Different Words: 150 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.039 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.955 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.686 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 98 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 74 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 44 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 26 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.425 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.786 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.36 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.543 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.076 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 156, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...r at home. It means that from a baby to a adult, most of children spend their tim...
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Line 3, column 165, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the children') or simply say ''most children''.
Suggestion: most of the children; most children
.... It means that from a baby to a adult, most of children spend their time with parents so they c...
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Line 5, column 318, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
... in educational field because there are many different traits of people. Ultimately, children ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, so, apart from, for instance, i think, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1362.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 266.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12030075188 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76170234283 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586466165414 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 425.7 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.3134228091 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.2857142857 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218915694456 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.081979390549 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0504829811701 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149617617067 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0457675847059 0.056905535591 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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