People are calling into question the idea about acceptance of the new culture of a new country in which they move. While some advocate the idea that new immigrants should keep their own culture and live as a minority, others dismiss them as they think individuals should accept the culture of the new country. Both sides of the arguments present rational ideas, which will be elaborated.
On the one hand, supporters of the idea that new immigrants should live as minority assert that the benefits accruing to them are by no means negligible. To begin with, individuals who keep their home culture can raise their children better. That is to say, they do not have to go to the new country and look for the classes or read books about the new culture and based on those try to grow up their children. These people can easily raise their children based on their own culture and they do not have to mix it with the culture of the new country. In other words, due to the fact that sometimes not having a great understanding of new culture, when these immigrants try to teach it to their children, they may not teach them in a right way. Therefore, the children of those immigrants may not have a sustainable personality, because of the mixture cultures they grow up with. Being a minority and keep their own lifestyle, thus, might be more useful.
On the other hand, others put forward the argument that being a minority in a new country does not have a good consequence. The most compelling reason justifying their assertion is that the new immigrants are isolating themselves in a new world. To put it differently, the more they keep themselves out of the new society, the more they are likely to be isolated from the new society. This in turn have a far-reaching negative impact on them. That is, these immigrants are bound to deal with mental problems such as depression, and insomnia. Owing to the fact that they are only communicate with a limited number of people.
To sum up, there are logical points on both sides; however, I am of the opinion that people who are going to live in a new country should accept the new culture.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 729, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER
Message: Consider replacing "in a right way" with adverb for "right"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...their children, they may not teach them in a right way. Therefore, the children of those immig...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, may, so, therefore, thus, while, such as, in other words, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 44.0 24.0651302605 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1761.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 381.0 315.596192385 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62204724409 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53089969287 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.451443569554 0.561755894193 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 550.8 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.1412730155 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.588235294 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4117647059 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.371500551862 0.244688304435 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125716929503 0.084324248473 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105464860552 0.0667982634062 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.273455176383 0.151304729494 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0959006229637 0.056905535591 169% => OK
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 50.2224549098 132% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 12.4159519038 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.58950901804 85% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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