Commercial ads fill every corner in today's society. Some people suggest public schools to accept advertisements for the sake of financial benefit, while others concern about its negative impacts on children. In my opinion, to have commercials in schoolyards is advantageous for those schools lacking budgets. However, a strict selection mechanism should be set up to ensure the proper types of ads published in schools.
On the one hand, allowing businesses to have advertisements in schools benefits education financially, especially for those school boards with such tight budgets that even couldn't afford to sign paychecks on time. As we all know, the more funding is available; the more money can be spent on children. With the income from ads or donations from sponsors, schools will have more capital allocated to better facilities and equipment. Consequently, students are able to access to better educational conditions. For example, a report on People's Daily revealed a news story that happened in Shanxi Province last year. Because of the property of the local government, schools there were facing close. To save the schools, the school board had local businesses to become primary sponsors and bare their brands in the schoolyards. As a return, these businesses donated to the schools as the payments for the commercial promotions. In this case, the schools survived, and the local companies have been promoted. This mutually beneficial result proves that advertising in schools has advantages.
On the other hand, however, school administrations should set up a well-performed selection system to make sure all ads published in schoolyards are proper ones. Even though commercials can bring schools additional income, educators mush notice that not all kinds of products or services are suitable for an educational environment. For instance, products such as stationaries, books, computers or sports equipment are good choices, while luxurious cars or jewellery will be improper, not to say some specific commodities that should be kept out of the sights of children at all. Thus, schools should have strict rules on what kinds of commercials are allowed and what are not. The well-regulated ads-in-school policy is vital and effectively ensures schools with both better resources of funding and the purity of study surroundings.
To sum up, I agree that schools take commercial ads to increase available budgets. However, it is also a must for schools to have an advertisement filter system to ensure that only proper ads can be accepted.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, however, if, so, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, such as, in my opinion, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2160.0 1615.20841683 134% => OK
No of words: 402.0 315.596192385 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37313432836 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98946194999 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 176.041082164 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562189054726 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 654.3 506.74238477 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.3432968339 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.857142857 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1428571429 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42857142857 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235449735184 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0745830685879 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0529815769423 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15715070299 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0258419997679 0.056905535591 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 78.4519038076 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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