Some people think that prison sentences should not be used in dealing with criminals. Education and job training should be used instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Many individuals believe that putting the prisoner into re-education camp as a replacement for imprisonment when people marked as criminals are the best solution for the ones who violate the law. I agree with that idea because it helps prisoners to get better treatment and have a chance to redo their life.
When prisoners are in re-education camps, they can get proper treatment and facilities prepared for criminals. Individuals with criminal records tend to lock up in cells and cannot communicate with others, but in camp, they can talk with anyone and in the right way that makes prisoners lower their intensity. For example, if criminals are making friends, they can put down their wariness about their surroundings as they have a rational dialogue. Moreover, they can learn how to live from the mistakes of others, which helps them to reduce the chance they commit crimes. Furthermore, they have chances to learn more knowledge and training for jobs which they intend to apply when in a re-education camp. It helps criminals to have purposes in life and better preparation for their departure when they are left prison.
Also, while spending time in prison to learn and redeem their crime, people who have criminal records can get a chance to redo their life. After they finish serving their sentence and left camp, with the knowledge and career training are obtained when in prison, criminals can get jobs accepted. As a first step to living like an average person, they can make a living with their jobs and access to many things they dream of having. For instance, they can enjoy their life in a big house while having a big family that gives them hope and support, which never occurred before. That makes people with criminal records can get success in life if we use the right method to deal with them.
To be concluded, with the help of re-education camp, I believe a better future will be created for individuals who commit crime because camp helps prisoners to involve the right environment and have a chance to redeem their crimes.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, while, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1714.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 350.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89714285714 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48404541679 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.462857142857 0.561755894193 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 522.9 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 36.2311175311 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.428571429 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78571428571 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13265598664 0.244688304435 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0610754550902 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0459027947788 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.099093352253 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0204534376202 0.056905535591 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.