Some people think rich countries should help poor countries by giving money directly. Others believe there are more effective forms of international aids. What is your opinion?
Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
While many people might think that the wealthy countries should provide financial aids for the poorer, others believe that there are
several ways that are better for bridging the gap between the rich and poor. In my opinion, I mainly agree with the latter views for several reasons.
We should first consider the root of the causes that is poor education. In poor nations, the younger and working adults who are responsible for wealth creation and countries development do not have opportunities to have access to university, college or even school. Therefore the wealthy should invest in the building of school, universities and finding the well-qualified teachers for supporting the poorer nations if they want to see that they can get rid of poverty completely. With the firm foundation of education, Japan is always one of the most developed countries, regardless of the high frequency of natural disaster.
Another option might be considered is technology acquisition that is seen as greater than financial aids. This is because these breakthroughs in this field require a massive amount of money, a huge number of well-qualified researchers, as well as a long run of trial process. Instead of receiving money, the developing countries should integrate these breakthroughs in their key areas in order to have a rapid growth of industries and economies as a whole. The more cutting-edge technologies countries develop, the more economic progress they have.
In conclusion, there are two typical ways that could help poor countries develop completely. What the developing countries need most is not money, but talents and advanced technologies in key areas.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1407.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 265.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30943396226 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93614491403 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.611320754717 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 420.3 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.8384241873 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.25 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0833333333 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191030086214 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.069310161156 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0521471920032 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116610941137 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0433062026058 0.056905535591 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.32 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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