Some people think that school children need to learn practical skills such as car maintenance or bank account management along with academic subjects at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Along with the rapid growth of the economy, more and more requirements have to be fulfilled and students must be fully repaired as soon as possible for their impending future. Knowing this situation, people have proposed a method in which children are taught realistic skills such as money management or car maintenance besides academic knowledge at school. In my opinion, I strongly concur with this remedy.
Firstly, learning practical skills and scientific knowledge simultaneously can act same as application and theory. By doing this, students can understand why they have to learn basic principles about mathematics or physics at school and acknowledge of the way these knowledge are applied in real life. Therefore they can cultivate the passion with these subjects and gain a deeper insight into theoretical issues. In this way learning academic problems has no longer been a torture but instead it has become a useful yet fun experience. For instance, by learning the way car operate we can examine the use of Newton’s Law in calculating the force of engines or The Bernoulli’s equation in the pistons.
Secondly, realistic skills like car maintenance can be a key for survival. At least one in their lifetimes have every individuals encountered a situation in which their cars suddenly broke out at the middle of nowhere in midnight. Without any support from local residents, unless they try to fix their cars, they will face the risks of criminals. Moreover, acquiring these skills at early age, from a systematic source like school will help to reduce false knowledge and the cost for services as we can maintain our assets by ourselves.
In conclusion, strongly support the idea of providing realistic knowledge apart from theoretical one at school.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'this knowledge' or 'these knowledges'?
Suggestion: this knowledge; these knowledges
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...ese knowledge are applied in real life. Therefore they can cultivate the passion with the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, apart from, at least, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1499.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24125874126 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91115781872 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604895104895 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 465.3 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2005095302 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.307692308 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5384615385 7.06120827912 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230787842145 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.078798093062 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0656128249458 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134602738336 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.046873699904 0.056905535591 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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