Some people think that school reward students who show the best academic results , while others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvements. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Results at school are known as the main factor reflecting how student's studying during school year. While pupils are thought to be deserved a reward for most excellent performance, others oppose that no matter how their achievements are, students' efforts should be appreciated by presenting them with an award. Two both sides will be discussed in this essay.
On the one hand, the award should be given to the scholars ranking first in respect to studying. Undoubtedly, this holds a competition among students to select the winner for championship, which encourages them to achieve magnificent results,so most brilliant pupils are nominated for an award they deserves to receive what they make efforts to get. In other words, the scholarship is awarded the only one who shows the best academic results during all studying process.
On the other hand, progress in studying is advised to be given a great compliment. To begin with, it is no doubt that this is a significant opportunity to all students. There is an irrefutable fact that some are not as intelligent as others, so not only does reward stimulate the spirit of learning among students, but it is also a chance of showing what they make an attempt. In addition, it becomes their motivation of studying. Although they can't rank first, they can take pride in themselves for progress.
In conclusion, given the fact that it is said that improvement is much more essential than first rank, personally, students advance their levels to achieve as much brilliant results as possible.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, while, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, no doubt, in other words, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 10.4138276553 10% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1288.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 255.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05098039216 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7899694009 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.580392156863 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 385.2 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.9371077123 49.4020404114 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.333333333 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.25 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6666666667 7.06120827912 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184145976663 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0612055659369 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0628062527326 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106254651845 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0394013412762 0.056905535591 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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