Some people think that schools have to be more entertaining, while others think that their sole purpose is to educate. Which do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Over the past decades, conventional teaching in schools has broadly translated into an entertaining interaction between teachers and students. Alongside this changing pattern in majority of educational institutions, the latest sociological discoveries has casted light on its desired outcome of alleviating academic pressure and intensifying teaching efficiency. The aim of this essay is set to explore the advantages of employing entertainment in schools with supports underpinned by those academic work.
To begin with, it is intuitively obvious that incorporating curriculum with entertainment is widely perceived as a remedy for strain given by school. What this means is that the enjoyable activities can unwind the stress given by the vigorous lifestyle necessitated by contemporary assessment systems. For instance, recent empirical research from the Hong Kong University established that junior learners who experience an entertaining means of education are less likely to be stricken by academic pressure, which was the main culprit of student’s suicide case in last year. Consistent with this line of thinking, coupled with accompanying interaction with teachers, the entertaining elements embedded in cultivation is likely to ameliorate the pressure from routine academic work perplexing the youth.
Meanwhile, another pivotal component to remember is that enjoyable learning, to a considerable extend, can foster the progress on acquiring knowledge. This is because practical experience given by these events has a vitally important role to play on implanting message for students who are impressionable in their formative years. In fact, after being interviewed by an extensive study conducted by the Education Society, 90% secondary school students admitted that enjoyable lessons encompassing western movie playing and classical drama participation can considerably ease language acquisition. Consequently, joining a class with entertainment pervasively constitutes a positive driver on cultivation and enrichment in certain disciplines.
Overall, there is undeniable evidence suggested that learning with entertainment has a crucial significance on relieving academic strain and reinforcing the quality of learning. Given the strength of evidence, it is predicted that the means of enlightenment will pervasively become more entertaining in foreseeable future.
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Suggestion:
...s intuitively obvious that incorporating curriculum with entertainment is widely ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, if, second, so, while, for instance, in fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.3376753507 252% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2056.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 335.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 6.13731343284 5.12529762239 120% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.38060722874 2.80592935109 120% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.629850746269 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 645.3 506.74238477 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.7718875764 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 158.153846154 106.682146367 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7692307692 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61538461538 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0852255625264 0.244688304435 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0311235027702 0.084324248473 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0247960614687 0.0667982634062 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0503973819009 0.151304729494 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0140603217271 0.056905535591 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.4 13.0946893788 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 20.72 50.2224549098 41% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.44779559118 196% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 11.3001002004 147% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 18.63 12.4159519038 150% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.05 8.58950901804 129% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 78.4519038076 167% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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