Some people think that schools schould reward students who show the best academic results, while others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvement. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
People have different views about whether award should be given to those who are excellent in academic scores or those showing improvement in the class. while I agree that school should give a gift to the best student, I would like to argue that giving award to improvement students is more reasonable.
On one hand, there are several reasons why award should be applied to those who are outstanding performance in the class. Firstly, the aim of giving reward is that it motivates student not only to study harder but also to make an effort to get their target. For example, a great student are willing to spend a numerous time to study instead of playing game online or going out with friend. In addition, prize can create a high competitive environment in class because by living in this environment forces students continuous effort to study in courses. As a result, excellent student deserve to grant a scholarship in school.
On the other hands, every individuals who make strikes in their studying result should be considered to get an award because of some reasons. First of all, it gives to every body an equal chance to achieve award rather than only focus on higher academic result. This could be because, instead of feeling disappointed when competing with their the top of the classmates, student who are recognised their effort will feel more motivated if they are rewarded for making remarkable progress. Furthermore, different students process a different talents. Therefore, Assessing a excellent student based on their best academic result is difficult. Award should be given to those who showing improvement not only his/her interested courses but also on his /her unfavorable subjects.
In conclusion, it is obvious that excellent student deserve to get award however, school should recognize the effort of improvement students by providing a gift in oder to motivate them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1590.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 312.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09615384615 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7203892647 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538461538462 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 500.4 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7260257452 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.571428571 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2857142857 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.4285714286 7.06120827912 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260579774256 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0946111994286 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.049829766636 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172638478394 0.151304729494 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0606808630498 0.056905535591 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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