Some people think that schools should reward students who show the best academic results, while others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvements. Discuss both views and give your opinion
It is argued that how schools should reward their students. While some individuals say that schools should rewarded students who are distinction, I believe that rewarding students who show improvements is more crucial.
On the one hand, students having the best study results should be rewarded because of many reasons. Firstly, they are students who studied hard to gain these results so they deserve to be identified. Secondly, this is a way showing that schools highly appreciate their results and this is likely to encourage the competition between students. The studying condition where students are compatitive to others is an ideal environment for the improvement of students.
On the other hand, I believe that it is more neccesary to reward students who have improvements. With the average students, they are likely to make greater efforts to enhance themselves, compared to students who are already good and do not try so hard. Rewarding them is a way to record their efforts and encourage them to work harder in the future. This also promotes a positive learning prespertive of students which focuses more on enjoyment and understanding rather than high scores. Students might feel less anxiety because they are not put under the pressure of high scorce and therefore, cheating in exams decreases.
In conclusion, it seeems to me that rewarding students who have improvements is better than rewarding the best students
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 41.998997996 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1203.0 1615.20841683 74% => OK
No of words: 230.0 315.596192385 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23043478261 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89432290496 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81717994376 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 176.041082164 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.54347826087 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 366.3 506.74238477 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.9447619818 49.4020404114 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 100.25 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1666666667 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.16666666667 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.405136752955 0.244688304435 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.166036242196 0.084324248473 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.146903412679 0.0667982634062 220% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.298678197853 0.151304729494 197% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118674487481 0.056905535591 209% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 78.4519038076 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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