Some people think the secondary school should study non-academic subjects such as Civic or Religious Studies. Others argue that this a waste of time and those children should only study academic subjects like mathematics and science.
Some people think that high school should learn non-academic courses like Religion studies instead only focus on academic courses. Others said it would consume time. In this essay, I would describe these both opinions.
The reason why students in the secondary school should be taught about Civic or Religion Studies is because Religion is something that could not be separated from human life. There is phrase “ora et labora” which means pray and work. If it is interpreted for students to balance attitude and the academic. Moreover, Religion could lead us in peace, so when they are in trouble they would face it calmly. For example, the number of students who committed suicide in South Korea has increased every year. This is caused by pushing them too much in academic subjects without stabilizing their spiritual. Therefore, when they could not reach their target, it would cause them to become distressed and do dangerous things.
On the other hand, there are two reasons why schools should not take Religion Studies as a curriculum. Firstly, people’s faith is not something that should be assessed then written on the report card. Because, in Religion educations in many schools, teachers ask their pupil to memorize a lot of paragraphs from the holy book, but they actually do not have the understanding about them. Additionally, Religion should be a device that connects the person to God. Secondly, most of the educator are not compatible. They educate the student to be radical such as calling the untruth of other religions. So, the students would make a group that only include people who have the same beliefs. Furthermore, citizens usually found some students in 15-17 years old who committed suicide while killed people who have different faith due to radical teachings that they learned.
All in all, I think religion is something that has powerful role in students’ live. However, students need to be educated about religion without making it as a syllabus.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, while, for example, i think, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1683.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 326.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16257668712 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6424648954 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588957055215 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 511.2 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.3309744489 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.15 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3 20.7667163134 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.05 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 3.4128256513 293% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213596491181 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0631264525141 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0916154188487 0.0667982634062 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149297431502 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.122442914932 0.056905535591 215% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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