Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged, others believe that children who are taught to cooperate rather than compete become useful adults.
Discuss both views and give your opinion
A few individual assume that competitive spirit should be inculcated in young people while, others are of the opinion that young ones who are taught cooperation instead of competition becomes responsible adults. This essay agrees that children who are taught cooperation instead of competition becomes responsible adults in the society.
To begin,those who support a sense of competition amongst children believe that it imbibe autonomous power to strive beyond all odds. This is because, they would want to remain the best therefore, they will do everything within their power to get to the top. For example, I recently interviewed a high school student on the reason he prefers to study alone, he responded that, he is striving to be the best in his class therefore, would not want to be distracted by other students. This example support the above assertion.
On the other hand, those who support cooperation among children are of the opinion that it breeds interpersonal relationship between children. More so, they also assert that it makes kids to work together and share common ideas. Further and even more importantly, they feel that it breeds out selfishness from kids as they strive not only for their future success but that of others as well . For example, a famous doctor was recently interviewed on national television on why he likes sharing his knowledge with upcoming medical doctors, he responded that from infancy he was instructed to work with others as a team in all areas of life. This instance support the above assertion that cooperation makes youngsters to become responsible adults.
In conclusion, while they are convincing argument on both sides of the debate as to whether to encourage competition or cooperation amongst children, I believe that cooperative attitude should be built up in children for positive upbringing.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, therefore, well, while, as to, for example, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1561.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22073578595 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85598591655 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545150501672 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 488.7 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 5.43587174349 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.3727036985 49.4020404114 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.083333333 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9166666667 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.91666666667 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287231057427 0.244688304435 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110569434434 0.084324248473 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110500694793 0.0667982634062 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200356725238 0.151304729494 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0983953437751 0.056905535591 173% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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