Some people think that shops should not be allowed to sell food or drinks that are scientifically proven to be bad for people’s health.
Do you agree or disagree?
some people believe that a store should be banned from selling unhealthy foods. While I agree with this idea, I still think that junk food has also some benefits.
On the one hand, eating unhealthy foods are able to cause typical problems on consumers’ health. this is because these foods contain plenty of sugar, fat, and salt, it leads to an effect on health such as obesity, heart disease, and blood pressure. Moreover, the outside of these junk foods is attractive and colorful. therefore, a consumer, especially children, can spend a lot of money buying those. As a result, the offspring can be overweight; and their parents have to lose a ton of budgets to send a child to a weight loss center. Last but not least, there might be some investment in medical facilities if people keep eating fast food as they gain weight rapidly.
On the other hand, the consumption of unhealthy food is necessary for a busy bee person. In modern life, people are busy at work; and they do not have sufficient time to cook. therefore, the best solution for them is a prepared-food. it is quite cheap and convenient; for that reason, they do not waste a lot of time preparing. Furthermore, there are more and more fast-food companies, for example, KFC, Lotteria, MC. Donald, which contributes to an economic perspective on an annual basis. if a government does not allow to sell junk food, it will seriously impact on the GDP and market labor.
In conclusion, fast food can contribute to the in terms of an economy; and be convenient for busy people. However, this definitely influents on people’s health.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1342.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 276.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86231884058 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76798315183 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.605072463768 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 405.0 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.3792002677 49.4020404114 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 78.9411764706 106.682146367 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2352941176 20.7667163134 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.41176470588 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322423527399 0.244688304435 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0922334519677 0.084324248473 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0655557437348 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208596030589 0.151304729494 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0511947670854 0.056905535591 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 13.0946893788 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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