Some people think that sports play an important role in the development of society. Others think they are nothing more than a leisure activity. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is believed that sports are important in society's development while others argue that they are just a kind of entertaining activity to relax. This essay will discuss both sides of the argument in detail and provide evidence as to why I am more inclined towards the former.
On one hand, a country would benefit a great deal from sports events like the Olympics if it could be a host nation. Since the competition was held in that country, people from all around the world will gather there to watch. This will increase the popularity of the nation, more tourists will come to visit, therefore, boost the economic growth faster. For instance, Brazil was the host nation for the 2016 Summer Olympics and this occasion had brought many beneficial effects to this place, especially its tourism. Furthermore, sports can solve a major problem these days which is obesity. Due to the fact that fast food and processed food is widely popular nowadays, fat individuals are also dramatically rising and this has an adverse impact on human lives. Exercise by playing sports is the most effective and fun way to move their bodies to burn fat and excess calories.
On the other hand, I would argue that schools place too much value on sports curriculum is not healthy, and participation in sport should be an out-of-school activity. Citizens, particularly students can have more relationships while playing sports with others because when they engage in team sports, they will have to play together and learn how to be united as one in order to reach their team's goal. Another reason is that physical exercise reduces the stress hormones in your body and stimulates the release of endorphins. These endorphins may give you more energy and focus for whatever life has.
In conclusion, although both views certainly have some validity, it seems to me that it is better to think sports is one of the essential factors to improve both individuals' lives and the community as a whole.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 71, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...ue that schools place too much value on sports curriculum is not healthy, and particip...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, may, so, therefore, while, as to, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1637.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 335.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88656716418 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57555726213 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.623880597015 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 511.2 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.2375313922 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.928571429 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9285714286 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249502526112 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.069272351267 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0625743145937 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152938763886 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.058438696287 0.056905535591 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 71, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...ue that schools place too much value on sports curriculum is not healthy, and particip...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, may, so, therefore, while, as to, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1637.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 335.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88656716418 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57555726213 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.623880597015 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 511.2 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.2375313922 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.928571429 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9285714286 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249502526112 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.069272351267 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0625743145937 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152938763886 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.058438696287 0.056905535591 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.