Some people think that subjects like arts, music, drama and creative writing contribute more towards a child's overall development. The school curriculum should provide more time for these subjects to be taught if the school wants all-round development of children.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience
School is a place of overall development of a kid. This can be acheived only when schools include all subjects along with extra curricular activities like arts, music, drama and creative writing. Due to which, some people support the opinion that more time should be reserved for these subjects, while others donot agree with this. I, however agree with the former thought.
Every student is unique and posess special talent. It is very important for their teachers and parents to identify such skills and encourage kids to pursue it. Schools can aid this by investing more time on such activities along with regular study. This will enhance not only the creative abilities, but also help in shaping one's personality. For instance, music can help soothe and calm mind. It acts as a referesher, also playing musical instruments can increase one's concentration and multi-tasking abilities.
Additionally, experts believe that kids who engage themselves in different kinds of activities have better logical and rational thinking abilities when compared to other students, which in turn will lead to all-round development. Furthermore, student who are interested in specific subjects can start training early, and eventually can build their whole career around it. For example, when we see sportsman like Usain Bolt or Kobe who have peaked their careers, these people had identified their interest early in life and have followed it throughout.
In conclusion, a holistic approach is required to attain overall development of pupils and this can be achieved by providing equal time to all various subjects.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1358.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 254.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34645669291 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7128012678 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.661417322835 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 419.4 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.7287214644 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.0 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1428571429 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.28571428571 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265342367464 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0838629827233 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0767733658902 0.0667982634062 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161970533277 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0956294637941 0.056905535591 168% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.45 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.56 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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