Some people think that success in life comes from hard work and determination. Others think money and appearance are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is undeniable fact that, nowadays vast majority of people “Judge a book by its cover” but, a growing number of people believe that attempting to achieve to goals is more valuable. In This essay I will discuss both sides and draw a suitable conclusion.

Firstly, one of the most conspicuous facts is that, individuals have a great tendency to reach to better situation without any struggling. One particularly good instance is that, people like to attract others attention by their outward features such as, car, house, dress, etcetera. Due to this reason, some people think wealth or richness gives them the attraction they need to seem successful. Moreover. In some cases, appropriate appearance is one of necessity items to be succeed. For example, having suitable dress trough a job interview might bring more opportunity to get the job.

Secondly, on the pivotal aspect that need much consideration is that, “money is not everything”. Although, wealth might be necessary but, it is not sufficient. In the other words, money do not lead to success lonely. In addition, there had been lots of millionaires or billionaires during the time but, most of innovations and inventions have done by people who was hard working. Inventive people such as Tomas Edison has changed the world by their attempts but, not by their money. Therefore, it can be proved that, hardworking might be a bridge to achieve to success.

By way of conclusion, therefore, based on above discussion, it seems fair to express this opinion that, hard working not only is a necessity to achieve individual success but, also, it bring more opportunity to gain money.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...ttraction they need to seem successful. Moreover. In some cases, appropriate appearance ...
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Line 5, column 314, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the innovations') or simply say ''most innovations''.
Suggestion: most of the innovations; most innovations
...es or billionaires during the time but, most of innovations and inventions have done by people who ...
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Line 7, column 186, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'brings'?
Suggestion: brings
...chieve individual success but, also, it bring more opportunity to gain money.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, as to, for example, in addition, such as, in some cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1398.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 272.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13970588235 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94426308626 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621323529412 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 430.2 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.6065936095 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.8571428571 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4285714286 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.92857142857 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202323418203 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.063252468222 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0474721353945 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115034689319 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0169748868376 0.056905535591 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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