Some people think we need more female leaders to create world peace and reduce violence. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Recently, there have been more and more widespread debates about whether women should be appointed to important positions of governmental leaders in order to help in peace-making and reduce violence all over the world. However, I would argue that this is such a naive perception and we should spend time focusing on the root problems.
Obviously, this is a well-founded conclusion due to the apparent lack of female leaders in government worldwide. Women are certainly under-represented politics and we should definitely have more of them being involved in this field so as to keep sex discrimination at bay and see all the issues from many points of views. The second point to note is that women are believed to be capable of balancing between negative and positive points of any issues and bring all parties into peaceful negotiations with their kind-hearted personalities and soft skills.
On the other hand, I personally think that the thought of having more women taking leadership roles in government could change the world is fallacious. First and foremost, some current major problems like terrorism, wars, and violence are caused by much deeper reasons than just gender. To be more specific, the main matters are racism, poverty, religious tension and so on and these problems can take years or even decades to be handled appropriately. As a result, regardless of the number of female leaders, the question of peace will remain as a thorny issue and the threat of wars could not be eliminated completely. Moreover, male leaders seem to be more tough and aggressive in running a nation while it is commonly thought that women with their weakness and maternity instincts are not able to make important decisions.
In conclusion, from my instinct, I believe that change the genders of the components of government is not the perfect solution and we should find the ways to tackle the root problems
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 233, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...re of them being involved in this field so as to keep sex discrimination at bay and see ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, moreover, second, so, well, while, as to, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1600.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 315.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07936507937 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87220720006 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596825396825 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 489.6 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 39.4618761518 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.454545455 106.682146367 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.6363636364 20.7667163134 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.72727272727 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149072455032 0.244688304435 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0556678823002 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0373997871037 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.08665637621 0.151304729494 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.042186830163 0.056905535591 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.78 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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