Some people think that work is the most important thing of people’s life. Without the success of career, life will become meaningless. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The question of whether only success in work makes life become meaning remains a resource of controversy in these days. While a number of people pursuing their line of work which is considered as the most important thing in their life, I would argue that career is just the one of many aspects that together could have effects on our life’s fulfillment.
Firstly, our planet has various kinds of people with different strengths as well as weaknesses. Some of them fortunately could realize happiness in working, that make they feel work just like their hobbies but not responsibilities. For instance, almost of doctors who devote their whole life to save others have to experience a long term of continuous study, research as well as practices. I believe their achievements in career are greatly significant in this case. However, by contrast, some others recognize that working is nothing but a way to earn money, used to facilitate for upgrading living quality. Thus, many rich people, who succeed in their profession are not always happy with their life, still find themselves lonely in a crowd.
In addition, according to Maslow demand chart, five aspects that make people feel satisfied, including orderly physiological demand (food, water, sex, home, rest), safety, social and relative relationships, esteem and last but not least self- actualization. Self-actualization occurs when you maximize your potential, doing the best that you are capable of doing, which may be your job, favorite activities such as volunteer, travel, painting, or even something ambiguous. Success in career definitely makes us joyful, but to meet human’s fulfillment, we need more than that. It is when people can accept themselves, together with all their flaws, prioritize and enjoy the journey, not just the destination. For example, a housewife who sets focus on raising her children, cook meals for her family completely could have a meaningful life and no need to be a powerful business woman.
In sum, working may be a method for us to have money and high social status. However, without success in career, people’s life still could be meaningful by a variety of activities which depend on our choice and attitude toward life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: Whether; The question whether
The question of whether only success in work makes life become ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, still, thus, well, while, even so, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1875.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 361.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19390581717 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89011679189 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.617728531856 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4453578075 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.0 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0666666667 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.13333333333 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274388665301 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0838949472574 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0747611271126 0.0667982634062 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187569990154 0.151304729494 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0788617417166 0.056905535591 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.