Some people think zoos are cruel and all the zoos should be closed. However, some people think that zoos are useful to protect the rare animals. Discuss both views and give your opinion.(revised version)
Zoos are places where animals live their captivity lives far from their natural habits. In the world there are two big visions: the animal-rights activists' one which say that zoos are cruel and they should be closed, and the other people' one, which say that they are useful to protect rare animals. In this essay I will talk about the two different views.
In my opinion, they are both right. On one hand some structures are very small for some types of animals, like elephants, hippopotamuses and giraffes. On the other hand, the animals cited before are protected species and they should live in a controlled habitat, without the danger of poachers.
One of the arguments that animal-rights activists bring is that in these places animals are treated in a very bad way, they are not cured, do not eat so much and people sedate them to domesticate them. Another way to tame them is with electrical shocks, although it is not used a lot nowadays. Moreover, people tend to give foods to animals but this can be poisonous for some type of creatures because the can not eat in a different way from their diet.
On the other side, the zoos employees say that animals are managed in a very good way, because they have to be protected. They are treated with the best drugs, are fed with the greatest food and are sedate with a very low measure of sedative.
In conclusion, there is not a correct point of view between these two groups of people, they are both right. Some zoos are actually cruel, especially in less developed countries, but at the same time there a lot of laws which protect animals in these structures.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, if, moreover, so, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.3376753507 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1353.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69791666667 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44201416043 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.513888888889 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 424.8 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.9276727401 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.076923077 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1538461538 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15384615385 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223663138287 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0768384250328 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0624689507412 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125146421637 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0493430595447 0.056905535591 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 12.4159519038 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.58950901804 86% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 78.4519038076 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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