Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later. Some people think that having these people to give a talk to school students is the best way to tell them about dangers of committing a crime. Do you agree or disagree?
In the contemporary life, many citizens think that well-behaviour inmates should have a discussion with young adults to warn them about the bad effects of being sent to prison. While I accept that a speech of prisoners has many advantages, it is not to say that it is the best way to educate children about crimes.
On the one hand, there are some reasons why I agree that a talk between criminals and students is beneficial to teach them about the harm of being sent to prison. First, engaging face-to-face with who has experienced would be more effective than a theoretical lesson. By telling the story in prison, all troubles or difficulties of committing a crime could be transmit from inmates to students, which could be more reasonable for teenagers to accept their advices and avoid some anti-social behaviors. Second, it could be also a beneficial arrangement for prisoners after releasing from prison. People who was punished by the law would feel more connected with the society and be even glad for doing something well, leading to decrease the recidivism rate.
However, some viable measures should be taken by families and government to tackle their increasing crime rate. First, parents should have some methods to educate their offspring in the right way. Because the main influence of crime stems is from a lack of a moral compass, which is often passed on from parents onto children from their early ages, for example, family violence, failure of parental controls or poverty would cause illegal activities. Second, the government should have population planning such as birth control policy and create more works for citizens. In fact, other extrinsic factor leading to crime is overpopulation which increase the competitiveness for job opportunities; therefore, unemployees could be prone to have some anti-social behaviors to make ends meet.
In conclusion, though there are many advantages of a discussion between inmates and school students, it seems to me that it would better for children to do other methods.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1715.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24464831804 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00635107858 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571865443425 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 527.4 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 16.0721442886 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 46.0 20.2975951904 227% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 143.141146269 49.4020404114 290% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 245.0 106.682146367 230% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 46.7142857143 20.7667163134 225% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 15.1428571429 7.06120827912 214% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217969585491 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0954040188313 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0448870535956 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107350059192 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0410961505517 0.056905535591 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 26.6 13.0946893788 203% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 24.79 50.2224549098 49% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 21.2 11.3001002004 188% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.0 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.17 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.0 9.78957915832 296% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 20.4 10.1190380762 202% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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