Some scientists believe that studying the behavior of 3-year-old children can tell which children would grow up to be criminals.
To what extent in your opinion is crime a product of human nature and is it possible to stop children from growing up to be criminals?
It is predicated on the assumption that research in three-year-old toddlers can detect their likelihood of committing crimes when growing up. Personally, I disagree with this hypothesis because the motives behind one criminal often vary from either their genetic endowment or the external factors. It is, however, feasible for adults to discourage young people from this destructive path.
To begin with, I believe it would be unwise to predicate that offending drives come from human nature while discounting the surrounding in which children are brought up. With regard to the former viewpoint, supporters believe that children are inherited certain temperaments from their parents. If born and raised by parents with deviant characteristics such as violence-oriented, deceptive and malicious, the young may take up some of these traits and maltreat the inferiors. This is probably added credence to the reasons why some argue that observing children’s behaviours can foretell their criminality.
However, I strongly hold a view that external environment can heavily influence on how a person would live his life. Given being born in a desperate condition with the absence of parental affection and proper education, there is every likelihood for a teenager to steal for food, or even do harm to others. Those juvenile delinquencies are, more or less, derived from circumstances rather than genes. Besides, an individual might involve in a despicable act due to his mundane greed of materialism or victory. With the fast-paced of modern life, yearns for wealth and fame has experienced an unprecedented tendency amongst the population. This, unfortunately, can mislead decent citizens to indulge in illegal practices such as fabrication, manipulation or corruption so as to make more profits, even at the expense of others’ safety.
Although offences are unavoidable in our life, there are still many tenable measures to curb the rate of juvenile crimes. First, parents and schools should design relevant approaches when teaching children at early age. The roots of serious criminality in young people often develop and flourish from adults. Therefore, to direct them to the right path, parents and teachers should set themselves as wholesome models in terms of manners and actions. An opened-discussion with these youngsters about criminals or draconian punishment may also act as a deterrent to educate them. Another way to promote a safer community with low crime rates is to accommodate children with better living condition whereby they are well-nourished and well-educated. In this respect, I believe governments should offer social allowance to shoulder the financial burdens of the parents during their upbringing. By doing that, the whole society will be more likely to thrive and prosper with less concern of being compromised by offenders.
In conclusion, to condemn criminals as a product of human nature alone is unjustified, and there are numerous ways for older people, comprising of parents, schools and governments, to discipline children as well as to deter them from offences.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: to
...fabrication, manipulation or corruption so as to make more profits, even at the expense ...
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Message: Did you mean 'comprising' or 'consisting of'?
Suggestion: comprising; consisting of
...ere are numerous ways for older people, comprising of parents, schools and governments, to di...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, well, while, as to, in conclusion, such as, as well as, more or less, to begin with, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 41.998997996 176% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2628.0 1615.20841683 163% => OK
No of words: 480.0 315.596192385 152% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.475 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.20363070211 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07374353282 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 296.0 176.041082164 168% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.616666666667 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 817.2 506.74238477 161% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.0306531434 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.454545455 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8181818182 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.31818181818 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.9879759519 326% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244468633483 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0618701112083 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0685711643718 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137512245709 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0730197713175 0.056905535591 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.2 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 168.0 78.4519038076 214% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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