Some sports are extremely dangerous but many people still like the very much. Why do people take part in dangerous sports? Give some suggestions on how to deal with these dangers.
Sports play a significant role in human life as it help to physical as well as mental development of individual. The given topic asserts that extremely dangerous sports are popular among people. In this essay, I am going to examine the possible reason for this trend and suggest some measures that authorities could implement to solve this problem.
To embark with, the main reason for pursuing these type of dangerous sports is for both fame and money involved in them. Because when they attempt some dangerous stunts like jumping from some tall buildings they got a lot of publicity and their news regarding the stunt become head lines on various news channels. Moreover, they feel great when they break any record and submit their record on Guinness Book of World Record. Once they got famous they earn alot of money. For instance, many famous multinational companies hire them to endorse their products and they earn good amount of money from them.
Secondly, another reason for pursuing such type of sports is to get thrill out of them. They like both taking risk and challenging their abilities as well as potential. They feel internal sence of satisfaction when they attempt such dangerous sports like paragliding, bungee jumping and so on. Apart from all this, when they face this type of danger they get courage and confidence to face the hurdles of the life.
Many steps can be taken to solve this problem. Firstly, these sports should be done under strict supervision. All safety precautions should be taken. Some sports should be performed after specific training under the supervision of adults. Government should only provide lincence to those companies who has proper equipment for these sports. Some people suggest that banning of these sports are the solution. However, I do not believe that banning is a good solution as we all know forbidden fruit taste sweeter and people will attempt these sports in hiding which would increase the risk involved in these sports.
To put it in a nutshell, I pen down by saying that, people do such sports for fun, money, fame and challenging their abilities. However, such sports are performed after sufficient training and under the strict supervision of adults.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, well, apart from, for instance, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 24.0651302605 187% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1862.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 370.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03243243243 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44722827368 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527027027027 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 549.9 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.942507576 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.6666666667 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.619047619 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42857142857 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262076796698 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0849908608489 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0814490896829 0.0667982634062 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142236475775 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0402110882146 0.056905535591 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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