There is a general consensus among people that it is crucial for children to take part in extracurricular activies outside rather than being addicted to playing video games. Personally, I am in favor of this view.
First, taking part in outdoor activities can hept children to become more sociable. It goes withour saying that nowadays, there are more children are becoming isolated from society as they allocate most of their time on playing video games. These chidren have a tendency to shy away from face-to-face meeting or hang out with friends. As a result, children can start feel embarrassing or avoid meeting with new friends when they grow up Hence, engaging children in peripheral acitivities such as playing footbal, going swimming, etc. can assist them to become more flexible and open to all of their friends.
Second, focusing too much on video games can cause obesity. This means that children always spend most of their days staring at the computer screen and playing game without out working out , thus, this can affect them and cause related-obese diseases. To illustrate, according to a survey of Oxford University in the US in 2018, there were about 68% of children encountering a probelem of obessity due to devoting time to play video game at home too much. As a consequence, children are also facing more with problems besides obesity unless they take up exercising.
In conclusion, I am highly recommend that it is necessary for children to participate in activities outside their house since they can bring children with great benefits in terms of becoming more sociable and avoiding obesity.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: recommended
...exercising. In conclusion, I am highly recommend that it is necessary for children to pa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, hence, second, so, thus, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1361.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09737827715 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69937607784 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.595505617978 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 423.0 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.8135076033 49.4020404114 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.416666667 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.25 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.83333333333 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221314747058 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0815341973803 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0642863976803 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136877687764 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0420784244806 0.056905535591 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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