Some working parents believe childcare centers can provide the best care for their children. Others believe that family members like grandparents can do a better job. Discuss both view and give your opinion

It is widely acknowledged that the debate over who can take best care of children—children centres or grandparents has been raging for some time. From my point of view, it is wiser for working parents to send children to children centres so that children can be better cared.

Admittedly, advocates of grandparents argue that grandparents are experienced at how to raise a child, and meanwhile this approach can avoid the high expenses charged by children centres. On the one hand, working parents were raised by grandparents, and hence grandparents have ability to look after their grandchildren. To illustrate, they know how to react to the situation that children are crying. On the other hand, if working parents send their children to children centres, they have to pay for the tuitions, which may be quite high. By contrast, they do not need to expend a coin if children are looked after by grandparents.

However, I am still in favor of the proposition that it is beneficial for children to stay at children centres when their parents are working. Initially, there are professional staff in children centres who have a good command of knowledge about how to take care of children. More specifically, the chef can supply healthy diet to children, and the teacher can teach children letters, Maths and so on. Moreover, due to the fact that there are many children in children centres, children can communicate with others and make their friends there. Therefore, going to children centres has a greatly positive impact on children's communication abilities as well.

All in all, while some people hold the view that grandparents can take care of their grandchildren. I still support that children cerntre is a better option for working parents.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, well, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1473.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09688581315 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98051445787 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539792387543 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 429.3 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.5778564198 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 105.214285714 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6428571429 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.64285714286 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.310881531014 0.244688304435 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127493369459 0.084324248473 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.060016011841 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228024249195 0.151304729494 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0443469462429 0.056905535591 78% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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