Studies have shown that many criminals have a low level of education. For this reason, some people believe that the best way to reduce crime is to educate people in prison, so that they can get a job when they leave. Do you agree or disagree?
There has been a belief that commiting crime causes due to lack of education. Therefore, the spread of education even in prisons may bring a reward in reducing criminals. Eventhough; some criminals have already grow up in rich education. I believe that teaching about the right behaviour plays a significant role in making crime rate fall.
Minors whose mindset can easily be affected from who have a bad personallity as their parents, siblings and friends. Right education can change their thinking to become better person without commiting the same crime. Moreover, the criminals might not be awareness of how serious crimes are. For example, a person that is not get an accurated education can not know about the dangerousity of drugs and keep selling them for others. Thus, teaching people in prison can prevent them from commiting crime that they do not have an awareness about.
On the contrary, there have been criminals who are taught of right beheviour, but still do the otherwise. They have been grown up in rich education, so teaching them in prison is helpful. Futhermore, lots of crime can not easily change their mindset or have mental problems. They may not cooperate to study and harm people teaching them. As a result, educate them can cause risky situation for other innocent people.
To summarize, accurated education can boost criminals knowledge about right and wrong behaviour in order to decrease the crime rate as they can get a better job in lieu of commiting crime. However there always be exceptions due to the unchangeable in personality and thinking of criminals.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, thus, for example, as a result, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1342.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 264.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08333333333 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65280271768 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 176.041082164 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534090909091 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 418.5 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.1970093718 49.4020404114 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.875 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.375 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.9879759519 276% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.334231530946 0.244688304435 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108025421805 0.084324248473 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.061530682883 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209269164821 0.151304729494 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0487716201963 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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