Studies have suggested that nowadays children watch much more television than they did in the past and spend less time on active or creative things. What are the reasons and what measures should be taken to encourage children to spend more time on active or creative things?
It is widely acknowledged that there has been a drastic increase in the amount of time that children spend on watching television. Therefore children have less time taking part in active and creative activities. This trend can be ascribed to a number of reasons, and I believe that some viable measures should be taken to tackle this issue.
There are two main driving factors leading to this current trend. The primary reason could be parent have less time for their children. Nowadays, parent are occupied with the hectic schedule of work . They often have to go for work and scarcely have time to play with their children, especially outdoor activities. Therefore, they want children to focus on an activity that do not require so much attention or do not dangerous such as watching television. Another clear reason is that the heavy school curriculum also prevents students from joining active tasks. For example, nowadays most school in Viet Nam place heavy emphasis on core subject like math and science, instead of active and creative ones like sports and music. This mean student have to spent most of their time to completing written assignments therefore they have almost no time for another activities.
A number of strong measures must be implemented to tackle the issue. First, parents should restrict the amount of time that a child can watch TV and spend more time with them. Together they could engage in outdoor activities. For example parents and children could play football or badminton at weekend to help children to get away from the television. Second, school should not only focus on academic subject but also extracurricular activities to help children develop comprehensively.
In conclusion, lack of children care and overwhelming school workload have made it difficult for many children to have a healthy life. Therefore, the proposed solution should be applied to rectify this problems.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1608.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 312.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15384615385 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66025429493 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548076923077 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.4782498031 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.3333333333 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3333333333 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.44444444444 7.06120827912 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.369936171523 0.244688304435 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113048445295 0.084324248473 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0780509333902 0.0667982634062 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233564383006 0.151304729494 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0663036178188 0.056905535591 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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