Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
It had been passed 5 years of employment when he accidentlly fell into the melting furnace. Not only a body did not remain to bury but also no money was left to his family, because the title of his job was: manual worker. Kilometers far from him, a famous trainer had made a fortune after 5 years. Sometimes it is thought that considerable more earnings are within sportsmen rights, but sometimes it is known as discrimination compared with other fields. In my opinion, arguments for marked differences in payment are inadequate.
From one viewpoint, each person should receive an income based on the extent of their specialized skills as well as the amount of money in which they get involved to improve economic cycle. For instance, a popular football player can attract many tourists who are passion for watching the match he plays for. As hotels and local businesses benefits, he will become the major reason for local economic growth in a short time. By comparison, baking breads needs no unique talent. Thus, it is fair to say that a practiced sportsperson have higher rate of return.
However, another point of view claims impact assessment will be discriminatory if only statistical results or incredible abilities are taken into account. In this case, the importance of careers with long-term or invisible effects, including teachers and psychologists, is completely ignored. Educating every single person, they have a profound influence on society; they can make an ineffectual person from a talented child or an athlete from a muzzy one. Likewise, people exposing their lives at danger just to subsist, like mine workers and border guards, are those facing with the most disparity since managing with severe mental and physical consequences is not considered extraordinary.
In conclusion, among opposing views, I will take the one that criticize the deep gap of salary between skilfull players in the sports scene and people in other areas.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 257, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...otball player can attract many tourists who are passion for watching the match he plays...
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Line 7, column 128, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
... salary between skilfull players in the sports scene and people in other areas.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, likewise, so, thus, well, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1644.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1375 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78903405098 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.7 0.561755894193 125% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.1068255725 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.6 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.93333333333 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0926646389681 0.244688304435 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0248130458307 0.084324248473 29% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0310556746387 0.0667982634062 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0587988818296 0.151304729494 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0325679221011 0.056905535591 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.32 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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