Task 2: Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think that school time should be used in learning important subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion?
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Task 2: Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think that school time should be used in learning important subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion?
Essay:
It is often argued that science and preparation of food should be added in courses, while others insist on giving precedence to more necessary subjects. In my opinion, I believe that both of these sides can help students find a great job after they graduated, and its depend on the specific career a person is interested in.
On the one hand, study the science of food and how to prepare it are beneficial to pupils. Firstly, scientific knowledge will encourage students to take a health-conscious approach to their diet. Because when students understand how food constituent such as vitamins, protein, fats, water, influence their physical health, they may prefer having balanced diet than fast food. The second reason why learning about foodstuff is the fact that chronic diseases caused by unhealthy eating habits often appear later in life, as toxic substances in food need to accumulate before it can cause a disease. It is clear that teach students about science of food can contribute to their skill development.
On the other hand, some students think that school’s time should be dedicated to studying important subjects. The goal of primary, secondary and high school education are for one pivotal end that is the university entrance exam. This mean placing more emphasis on main subjects like Math, Literature and English, which are more highly applicability when they graduated high school.
In conclusion, I believe that both study the science of food and how to prepare it or should take time to learn main subjects can be the right key for students. The choice of which one to follow will depend entirely on the individual and each country’s ministry of education.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... each country’s ministry of education.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, second, so, while, as to, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1748.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 341.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12609970674 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64638994555 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568914956012 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 517.5 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.440405476 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.823529412 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0588235294 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.58823529412 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.527878430743 0.244688304435 216% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.172421844142 0.084324248473 204% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.17752403903 0.0667982634062 266% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.29076061011 0.151304729494 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.285149968918 0.056905535591 501% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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