Task2 Some people think success in life comes from hard work and determination Others think money and appearance are more important Discuss both sides and give your opinion

Essay topics:

Task2: Some people think success in life comes from hard work and determination. Others think money and appearance are more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

It is supported by many individuals that budget and physical beauty play important roles in success. However, I consider that other factors such as hard work and perseverance are of more importance.
On the one hand, there are several reasons why wealth and physical attractiveness are the main consideration to obtain success. As we can see that individuals from an affluent family have certain advantages compared to someone who is from low or average income. People living in the lap of luxury can easily access to better education such as studying in abroad and learn more necessary skills. This could facilitate them to thrive in various work settings and achieve amazing accomplishments in their future. Besides, beautiful appearance helps them boost self-confidence, which might make a good impression with others and have more persuasive
On the other hand, it seems to me that people who are industrious and persistent have a better chance of success inmost aspects of life. Due to the fact that those would not easily give up their dreams or goals. They are willing to spend a huge amount of their time and energy to gain aims that they are pursuing. Thomas Edison, the first person in the world invested the light bulb, is a good case of point. Therefore, it is undeniable that hard work and perseverance are vital factors to reach the zenith of success.
In conclusion, while a number of people argue that money and appearance are more likely to bring success for people, I am of the opinion that hard work and determination are the key to reap laurels.

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Average: 7.1 (2 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 456, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ore, it is undeniable that hard work and perseverance are vital factors to reach ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, however, if, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1305.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 266.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90601503759 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75497227518 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.597744360902 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 414.0 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4475266867 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.75 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1666666667 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2492149514 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.074841639471 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0693633751621 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156654693928 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0553496309851 0.056905535591 97% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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