The tendency of human beings to copy one another is shown in the popularity of fashion clothes and consumer goods. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays there is a trend among a lot of people to mimic the choices of others when buying something. Many brands have been established by this trend. However, it is still untrue in many cases where people choose according to their real needs.
There are many people in this world, especially in the rich category, who spend a lot of money after being enchanted by the products used by their friends or neighbours. Many companies are becoming very popular not because of their real contribution to the society but for these people who can easily be locked into the so-called current trends. For example, IPhone has become the top smartphone brand not because of its value-for-money but for the rich and stylish people who pay thousand dollars just for show-off. Besides, high sale of many cosmetics and clothes is the result of the people copying their friends’ choices without considering the real benefits.
However, it seems that this trend is changing day by day and more and more people are focusing on their real needs because of the increasing awareness and analytical tools. For example, in India, sale of Xiaomi smartphones, which provide a lot of features with reasonable prices, has outstripped the top smartphone brands- iPhone and Samsung in 2017. The reason why more and more people are seeking for reals needs and value-for-money is that, compared to the increasing number of day-to-day expenses their income is low, which forces them to focus on the real benefits of the products.
In conclusion, it is true that a large volume of sale of some established brands is the result of freaky people who focus on others’ choices to keep themselves updated. However, there are still many people who buy based on their real needs.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 214, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to accord'.
Suggestion: to accord
...ntrue in many cases where people choose according to their real needs. There are many ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, however, so, still, for example, in conclusion, in many cases, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1466.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98639455782 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67063774848 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.517006802721 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 445.5 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.9623260963 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.166666667 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0254653260116 0.244688304435 10% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0118159020464 0.084324248473 14% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0216338150593 0.0667982634062 32% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0131940797274 0.151304729494 9% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.022852816447 0.056905535591 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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