There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heard everywhere nowadays?
Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.
Music plays a vital role in our daily life. Various kinds of music can find around the world that has roots in the culture or religion. Also in this essay, I would argue that all kinds of music international or traditional are important these days.
It is true that music gives us a lot of benefits. Listening to music helps us to relax and make gloomy days more interesting. Also, music is an expression of culture and history of a country. For example, it is an essential part of religious ceremonies such as weddings, funerals or yearly festivals. In short, music is the perfect art and our lives would be incomplete without it.
In my point of view, both kinds of music are crucial. In fact, traditional music bears the history and heritage of a nation and thoughts of a community so people can know a country better. On the other hand, young people follow international music or world music in this day and age. So it can be a sort of cultural exchange that helps to introduce languages and promote globalization. Like K-pop music or Korean pop music have many fans in different countries and because of that teenager and young people willing to learn Korean and search about their culture.
In conclusion, music is a gift of human lives. I believe that traditional and international music has equal importance and indispensable. Traditional music is the identity of a nation meanwhile international music is a universal language that you can communicate across cultural and linguistic boundaries.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, in short, sort of, such as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1256.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 258.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86821705426 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87536298177 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.550387596899 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 401.4 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.9157744366 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.5 106.682146367 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.125 20.7667163134 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.1875 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.411517424025 0.244688304435 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.153097804346 0.084324248473 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0746412751256 0.0667982634062 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.274254095028 0.151304729494 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0481036551024 0.056905535591 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 13.0946893788 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.67 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 78.4519038076 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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