There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need
music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the
International music that is heard everywhere nowadays?
You should write at least 250 words.
Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples
and relevant evidence.
It can not deny that humans gradually approach to entertainment more in this modern society, perhaps due to the rapid pace of the comfortable life. But there are many controversial opinions reflecting that citizens still fall in love with their traditional music but I would argue that the number of those who keen to International music is going up very quickly.
Until the date of a lot civilizations around the world , music has been an indispensable part of human life because while the new melodies which they had ever found before sneaked in their brain, they feel so interested that it can cure their pain or make their life more happy. And nowadays, music still keeps their proud position in human’s soul. People are able to enjoy their favorite song high and low, which carry for them a big enthusiasm, charge their battery and embolden them working harder with faster speed. Definitely, the melodies have been contributed greatly to the quality of our work every day.
With the ground successes around the world of singers and music bands , music industry has an astonish development speed. Thus, we can have more choice for our music hobbies. But there are lots of people being loyal with their traditional country such as elder people or middle-aged people. The traditional music contains the history of the whole country, national civilization for a long time ,as a result, it is able to express the preceding generation honestly. Besides, this kind of music is not mixed by other music which is the reason why it still carry a real precious value.
On the contrary, I would say that the increase in those who be a big fan of international music is faster than traditional music. First, this kind of music gives them a lot selections such as Electronic Dance Music, Ballad, Orchestra… which can be appropriate for all of our emotions in one day since they come to music when having some uncomfortable or special things arising in their bodies. Second, the music markets is vibrant which have the capable of giving the producer and composer the huge profits. Therefore, the entertainment cities released more and more music projects for audiences, which can lead to lots of new trends so teenagers are obliged to catch up with them to avoid being out of fashion and falling behind the developing society.
To sum up, we can not negate the important position of music in our life. Moreover, although the traditional music really gives us the marvelous emotions but the number of those who like international music still increase dramatically
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, honestly, if, moreover, really, second, so, still, therefore, thus, while, kind of, such as, as a result, on the contrary, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2132.0 1615.20841683 132% => OK
No of words: 432.0 315.596192385 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93518518519 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67721708985 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 176.041082164 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539351851852 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 666.0 506.74238477 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.8214529452 49.4020404114 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.411764706 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4117647059 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251875413532 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0999491613989 0.084324248473 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0594973027224 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167840312012 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0655564907154 0.056905535591 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 9.78957915832 199% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.