There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays?
In this day and age, there are varieties of music that exist around the globe. Is music necessary? Also, is a song particular to a country, far more important than foreign songs? In my opinion, i believe that music is needed, as it brings people of different cultures together, and that the traditional music of a country is much more better and beneficial than foreign songs, because it depicts a nations identity.
There are many reasons why music is necessary, one of such is that music is an art that brings different people around the world together. In other words, through music, different cultures are able to express their ideas and feelings, hence, different people from around the world are able to come together and make collaborations and compose a genius musical piece for all to enjoy. Take for example, the United Kingdom Glastonbury Festival, which take place annually, it is a place where different music artist around the world come to perform to a global audience, hence, this gathering creates unity amongst the different cultures.
However, despite music collaborations of artists from different countries in todays world, the traditional music of a country is far more important than foreign music because it represents the cultural identity of a nation. Further more, the more dominant a country's music than international songs, the less chance of it becoming long forgotten.Thus, preserving a nation's cultural identity through music.
In conclusion, i believe music is indeed important because it brings global cultures together, also a country's music is much more important than foreign music, as it is a representation of a nation's dentity.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 195, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...tant than foreign songs? In my opinion, i believe that music is needed, as it bri...
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Line 1, column 331, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
... traditional music of a country is much more better and beneficial than foreign songs, beca...
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Line 1, column 399, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...han foreign songs, because it depicts a nations identity. There are many reasons why...
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Line 5, column 346, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Thus
...ss chance of it becoming long forgotten.Thus, preserving a nations cultural identity...
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Line 5, column 363, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a nation' or simply 'nations'?
Suggestion: a nation; nations
...ecoming long forgotten.Thus, preserving a nations cultural identity through music. In ...
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Line 7, column 16, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...entity through music. In conclusion, i believe music is indeed important becau...
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Line 7, column 190, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a nation' or simply 'nations'?
Suggestion: a nation; nations
...ign music, as it is a representation of a nations dentity.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, so, thus, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1407.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 270.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21111111111 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83071774696 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 176.041082164 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477777777778 0.561755894193 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 450.0 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.1271399707 49.4020404114 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.7 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.3 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.530968708513 0.244688304435 217% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.265121775329 0.084324248473 314% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118247607776 0.0667982634062 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.376293560128 0.151304729494 249% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0679200772527 0.056905535591 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.0946893788 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 195, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...tant than foreign songs? In my opinion, i believe that music is needed, as it bri...
^
Line 1, column 331, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
... traditional music of a country is much more better and beneficial than foreign songs, beca...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 399, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...han foreign songs, because it depicts a nations identity. There are many reasons why...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 346, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Thus
...ss chance of it becoming long forgotten.Thus, preserving a nations cultural identity...
^^^^
Line 5, column 363, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a nation' or simply 'nations'?
Suggestion: a nation; nations
...ecoming long forgotten.Thus, preserving a nations cultural identity through music. In ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 16, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...entity through music. In conclusion, i believe music is indeed important becau...
^
Line 7, column 190, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a nation' or simply 'nations'?
Suggestion: a nation; nations
...ign music, as it is a representation of a nations dentity.
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, so, thus, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1407.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 270.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21111111111 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83071774696 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 176.041082164 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477777777778 0.561755894193 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 450.0 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.1271399707 49.4020404114 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.7 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.3 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.530968708513 0.244688304435 217% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.265121775329 0.084324248473 314% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118247607776 0.0667982634062 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.376293560128 0.151304729494 249% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0679200772527 0.056905535591 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.0946893788 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.