These days, many school-aged children own a smart phone.
Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at 250 words.
In recent years, smart phone has become an essential device for most people. Regardless of age, many adults usually use smart phones in various ways. Additionally, children who attend the school have their own smart phones. By using smart phones, they can easily find out information which helps children to study deeply. On the other hand, it doesn't give student not only advantages but also disadvantages. It causes serious problems, so many parents worry about students who own smart phones.
After smart phones become common devices to students, they can easily contact to their family. Furthermore, many applications have been come out these days for presenting the student's location to parents. One article which I saw last year, because of application, which show student's location, they could find their children if they don't go academies or school. Also, it is useful to study alone at home of a cafe. I saw many students attending online class by using their smart phones. It helps students to focus their study which they hard to understand. However, it doesn't always give advantages to them. Some school-aged children have gotten lower grade because of smart phones. Furthermore, the number of students who got grade problem has increased in recent years.
When I was a high school student, I had a smart phone as other students. It was really useful at first time, however, it had made me distracted than before. I couldn't focus on study during exam period because of social network services. I want to check every time and contact with friends. Smart phone made me feel to belonging my friends. Since my grades become worse, my parents had prohibited the smart phone during exam period. Moreover, that problem occurs not only me but also other friends. So many friends got stress from smart phones and grades. In addition, it has prevented the bond of parents and children. It is proper device for contacting without limitation, but it makes distance from students and parents. These days, we could see the moment that school-aged children only focus on smart phones during having meal with parents in restaurants. Additionally, more younger children, 1~7 years old, watch kids program by smart phones while parents take their dishes. It is good to be making them calm in the public places, but in the long run, that will cause children can live without smart phone.
Many people argue that smart phone is vital device these days. It improves people's lives, as well as technologies. Investors still have developed smart phones in various ways for better lifestyles. However, we should be careful not to addict on smart phones. They might cause serious problems to people, especially school-aged students. We should make alternatives to protect children from addiction of smart phones.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, really, so, still, well, while, in addition, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 24.0651302605 199% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2341.0 1615.20841683 145% => OK
No of words: 461.0 315.596192385 146% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07809110629 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5064116144 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 176.041082164 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518438177874 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 697.5 506.74238477 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 26.0 5.43587174349 478% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 34.0 16.0721442886 212% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 13.0 20.2975951904 64% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.2179427527 49.4020404114 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 68.8529411765 106.682146367 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.5588235294 20.7667163134 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.76470588235 7.06120827912 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 24.0 8.67935871743 277% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217865882288 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0624386818568 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0453289695941 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155345411366 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0305702153635 0.056905535591 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 13.0946893788 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 50.2224549098 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 11.3001002004 64% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.59 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.1190380762 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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