These days, mobile phones and the internet are very important to the ways in which people relate to one another socially.Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

In recent years, a plethora of electronic devices and technologies have been used for socializing. Therefore, they aided people to overcome the distance barrier and know more about each other. On the other hand, they resulted in weaker relationships due to the lack of physical communication. In my opinion, these technologies are immensely beneficial for our social life, but we have to use them wisely in order to preserve our relationships.

Due to the existence of several ways of communication, people are not keen on meeting each other frequently which resulted in fragile relationships. Since the smartphones allow people to see each other through video calls and live pictures, they feel as if they are living together, and they do not have to cut long distances in the pursuance of seeing each other. One salient example, people who are living in another continent away from their families rarely travel back to their hometown due to the easy connection between them and their relatives. Consequently, tenuous relations are produced resulting from the absence of physical contact.

Owing to the fact, that most employees do not have enough time to socialize, phone calls and social media could help them to contact with each other. Unfortunately, because of the rapid lifestyle that is common in most of the developed countries nowadays, people scarcely meet each other. For instance, labors who are using their physical potential during their work will be too exhausted to stroll out with their friends after finishing their work, instead of that, they tend to keep in touch with their friends by voice call or electronic messages

To sum up, mobile phones and the internet may have some prejudicial effects on our relationships, however, they are crucial to reach friends and relatives wherever they exist to socialize in a modern way that suits the current lifestyle.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 11, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...all or electronic messages To sum up, mobile phones and the internet may have ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, if, may, so, therefore, for instance, in my opinion, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1585.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17973856209 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80027224164 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601307189542 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 111.637400054 49.4020404114 226% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 144.090909091 106.682146367 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8181818182 20.7667163134 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.90909090909 7.06120827912 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116645575268 0.244688304435 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0432749745985 0.084324248473 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0276046394853 0.0667982634062 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0745771750316 0.151304729494 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0378391108785 0.056905535591 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.0946893788 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.36 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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