These days some people spend a lot of money on tickets to go to sporting or cultural events.
Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Many events are so popular that they make people willing to use a large amount of money to buy the tickets such as Olympic or Festival of Colors in India. A few individuals think this is a benefit for them to follow the idea, but others disagree with that. I believe that spending a huge sum of money on these tickets will cause a downfall for one’s finance.
Tickets of big events is a mean to entertain, if people use a big amount of cash to it, their asset will be depleted. In addition, it can affect to relationship and behavior of person to the outside world. For examples, many teenagers want to look cool in the eyes of their friends, so they buy live concert ticket to a popular singer or band. Their relationship with their families would be bad because they use money with that purpose. There can be a chance that occur thievery from these young ones if they do not meet their demand. For instance, if their families don’t provide them enough money to buy tickets, they will steal cash from their parents.
On the other hand, releasing stress by attending these events is claimed to be an advantage for spending money on the tickets. Therefore, they can enjoy the excited atmosphere of the events without minding about how much they spend on the tickets. Furthermore, when having an ease mind, they can perform better in their work and study.
To be concluded, spending cash on tickets to have fun in big events is just a benefit in a short period of time. But relationship and behavior can be dame because of unreasonable amount of money spending for tickets just to participate in. So think carefully before buying tickets.
Comments
Nowadays as per the global
Nowadays as per the global trend we can see the majority of people will be inclined towards the sports or cultural events and to see that they are ready to spend at any cost.In this essay I will examine merits and demerits of mentioned development before reaching to an appropriate conclusion.
There are numerous parameters of supporting this activities.First and foremost reason is in today's era there is no imparity between doing job or to play sports or take part in cultural activities as everything is consider to be identical as increase in this type of activities brings valuable young talents to see that people are going .Additionally,due to monotonous routine people are not getting time to live their life happily so to rejuvenate the mind people are going to this type of shows.To illustrate,nowadays when any of concerts or national cricket match will be there in downtown we will find it as housefull in few minutes.
On the other hand,cons associated with this trend are quite severe.Firstly,spending huge amount of money for entertainment can be used for some good purpose like helping the needy people.Secondly,there will be an tremendous decrease in social life as all wants to live and enjoy in nuclear family this will create communication gap between them.For instance,nowadays on weekends we will found that family will always go for the entertainment rather than to spend time with family.
To recapitulate,there evidently are cons of spending lot of amount of money on entertainment .I,however,considering the favorable impacts which it has like to see the young talents and to rejuvenate their mind,it can be determined that it is a positive development.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, look, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1372.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68259385666 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49069603276 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.522184300341 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 423.0 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.6899461528 49.4020404114 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 91.4666666667 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5333333333 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.26666666667 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142521288414 0.244688304435 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0563408886794 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0381296531088 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104274686389 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0427190541792 0.056905535591 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 50.2224549098 138% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 11.3001002004 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 12.4159519038 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 78.4519038076 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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