Today the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of society in which they are sold.
To what extend do you agree or disagree?
Advertising is a manipulative tool that controls consumers’ needs. Hence, some people believe that advertising boosts sales of products, and it encourages people to buy unnecessary products. In my opinion, I agree that the power of advertising interferes with people’s decision as they buy needless goods.
First, one of the primary cause of this phenomenon is that advertisements aim millennial generation by tempting them to stay up to date with the latest trend. For example, nowadays, a substantial proportion of young generation have more than one smartphone due to the strength of advertisements which sheds light on the features of the new phone. Therefore, they contribute to profoundly impacting on people’s decision as they succumb to the temptations of these desirable items with considerations.
Second, the prevalence of the brand promotion either on billboards on streets or on televisions is the original rationale for purchasing superfluous products. For instance, marketing companies hire popular celebrities to promote a product on their TV commercials, so they attract a large number of people purchase their products even if they do not need them. As a result, not only do they surge the sales of their most common goods but they also grow their profit. People seek after what satisfy their desire rather than cater their basic needs.
In conclusion, the power of advertising poses a credible threat to people because it leads them to waste their money on useless items. I concur that the advertisements are the true culprit for buying consumer goods, resulting in higher sales.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 281, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...n their TV commercials, so they attract a large number of people purchase their products even if ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, second, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1371.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 254.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39763779528 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14054059455 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.629921259843 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 414.9 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.3408507122 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.25 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1666666667 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06120827912 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185371221743 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0677159974856 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0410554191923 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105718933052 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0264165117973 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.34 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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