Topic: Countries where there is high unemployment most pupils should be offered only primary education, there is no point in offering secondary education to those who will have no hope of finding a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
As unemployment rate is increasing in some countries, some have argued that secondary education is now unnecessary, and children’s education should not be provided beyond primary level. While the opinion appears logical, I believe that this is a very narrowed perspective and I strongly disagree with this statement.
Firstly, formal education is a key element to create informed and responsible citizens. It should be noticed that the aims of education are to acquire knowledge and develop a critical mind. Primary education plays an important role in a child’s intellectual development while secondary level provides a wealth of practical knowledge which helps to prepare young people for the world of work. As the tremendous growth of technology, education programs help young generation keep up with the development of machines to enhance employment opportunities as well as job securities.
Secondly, the job market is unpredictable. No one can certainly say that the unemployment status will prolong in the future. In the era of great economic growth, outsourcing becomes popular strategy in many global companies. Besides, a lot of international corporations are now investing in other countries to expand their market which also creates more jobs for local residents. For example, Apple had their assembling factories in China which provided jobs for many local people who were struggling to find a job in a densely populated country. These jobs do not require complicated skills but basic understandings about frame and structure of assembly pieces.
In conclusion, it is necessary to offer children education at least to secondary level because education is essential to create a more educated future generation of people as well as provide practical knowledge for people before the changes of the economy.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, second, secondly, so, well, while, at least, for example, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1558.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 282.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.52482269504 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13310665731 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606382978723 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.4689007744 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.846153846 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6923076923 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.15384615385 7.06120827912 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197329373493 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0626643114304 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0418565410307 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110105910664 0.151304729494 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0174975407627 0.056905535591 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 50.2224549098 66% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.89 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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