TOPIC: Everyone should stay in school until they reach 18. Do you agree/disagree?

Essay topics:

TOPIC: Everyone should stay in school until they reach 18. Do you agree/disagree?

Many people hold the view that everyone should not leave school before they turn 18. While I think students should stay in school until they reach 18, I still believe that they can leave school early.

It’s true that students should be remained in school until mature. To begin with, they can earn a high school diploma results in meeting fundamental requirements for entering higher education. Thus they will gain in-depth knowledge. The good thing about it is that they can have more job opportunities with well-paid salaries and better working conditions. Another reason worth mentioning is that students can meet and interact with people from different backgrounds. As a result, they can not only make new friends but also they learn each other. This helps them develop professional relationships and have vibrant social life.

Nevertheless, I would argue that people can leave school before they turn 18. The first reason to be given is that some students come from disadvantaged backgrounds so they have to work to support their families. This leads to lack of time for concentrating on their studies. Consequently, they should leave school early to devote more time to their work. Moreover, some child prodigies can complete their curriculums sooner results from absorbing lessons quickly. Therefore, schools should be allowed them to graduate early.

In conclusion, while I agree that students should be remained in school until one reaches maturity age, I am of the opinion that they can leave school early because of several reasons.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 199, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...irements for entering higher education. Thus they will gain in-depth knowledge. The ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, thus, well, while, i think, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1310.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 250.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61956943027 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.588 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 374.4 506.74238477 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.5703539901 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.875 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.625 20.7667163134 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.4375 7.06120827912 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301132335953 0.244688304435 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10873289606 0.084324248473 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107344134308 0.0667982634062 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232239461311 0.151304729494 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11539558389 0.056905535591 203% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 50.2224549098 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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