Topic: As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree.
Nowadays, more and more company have action with the sole aim of maximizing profit. But in my opinion, if the companies want to achieve sustainable development they need to consider that social obligations are significant impotance, so i completely agree with that view.
On the one hand, the business have much social responsibility about jobs could enhance their public image in labour and local people, there fore increasing compertitive world. Firstly, when they have a new project, branch or company on the local area they should provide a lot of positions for local people who might be losing land to live or career was replaced by new companies. For example, in my home town, there was a company which name is Nghi Son refinery and petrochemical where is centre in vietnam two years ago; they have received local people for different job to help them obtaining in good financial health; so council and everyone have been extremely pleased about that company. Secondly, if companies hope all their employees are absolutly dedicated and devote entirely intelligence in working they should create more benefited policies for worker. Example, employer could meet the changing needs of labours and having high-quality of employees such as: a pleased wages, holiday entitlement, maternity leave, pension scheme and fair competitive policies.
On the other hand, if business do not want to go out of business they also should be deeply interested in environmental impact assessment. Nowadays, more and more company and industrial zones have been discharge chemical waste into river or sea, causing death to many fish and other aquatic animals. In addition, some companies have depleted natural sourses by cutting down trees without planting new trees to replace them. So each company should make more important discussion with government and local owner to have a positive impact on action rather than their presentations and commitments to environment. For example, the Fomosa company which is invest by taiwan last year, they disposeed of wast products from chemical process to “ Ha tinh” sea where is centre in Vietnam; if they have had positive responsibilities witth environment they would have not been lose imagination and reputation.
In conclusion, while companies aim priority profit they also consider about social obiligation to grow further in business
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It is a nice essay, but it
It is a nice essay, but it has grammatical errors. for example:
more and more company have action with the sole aim of maximizing profit.
more and more companies have actions with the sole aim of maximizing profit.
the business have much social responsibility about jobs could enhance their public image
the businesses have much social responsibility about jobs which could enhance their public image
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 135, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: therefore
...ublic image in labour and local people, there fore increasing compertitive world. Firstly,...
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Line 3, column 587, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to obtain' or 'obtain'.
Suggestion: to obtain; obtain
...l people for different job to help them obtaining in good financial health; so council an...
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Line 3, column 981, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'wage'?
Suggestion: wage
...quality of employees such as: a pleased wages, holiday entitlement, maternity leave, ...
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Line 5, column 652, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'invested'.
Suggestion: invested
...or example, the Fomosa company which is invest by taiwan last year, they disposeed of ...
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Line 5, column 876, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'lost'.
Suggestion: lost
...th environment they would have not been lose imagination and reputation. In concl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2011.0 1615.20841683 125% => OK
No of words: 376.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34840425532 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80320536756 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 176.041082164 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603723404255 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 639.9 506.74238477 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.422401532 49.4020404114 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.692307692 106.682146367 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.9230769231 20.7667163134 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.9230769231 7.06120827912 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127060884017 0.244688304435 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0532893645151 0.084324248473 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0377368625111 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0895871338658 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.021145774589 0.056905535591 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 13.0946893788 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 50.2224549098 69% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.43 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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