The two pie charts below show some employment patterns in Great Britain in 1992.Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

Essay topics:

The two pie charts below show some employment patterns in Great Britain in 1992.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts illustrate the information about males and females in employment in 6 broad categories,divided into manual and non-manual occupation in Great Britain during 1992.

In overall,men constituted a major in managerial and professional non-manual occupation;whereas,majority of women in clerical or related;however,both genders least proportion in other manual.

It can be seen from the information that in non-manual occupation,a huge number of working ladies than gents were founded in clerical or related acquiring 31% and 6% respectively. In addition to this,7% difference can be noticed in both genders ( men 36% and women 29% ) in managerial and professional field in specific nation in 1992. Interestingly,female (9%) and male (6%) attained a tiny proportion of the total percentage of other non-manual field in Great Britain From 1992.

The charts further prove that in manual,a negligible change of 1% can be seen in general labourers (ladies 27% and gents 26%) and other manual (men 2% and women 1%) in both genders in particular country during 1992. Lastly, the proportion of males (24%) were 8 times more as compared to females (3%) in craft or similar occupation in Great Britain between 1992.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, lastly, whereas, in addition, in general, in particular

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 4.0 24.0651302605 17% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1017.0 1615.20841683 63% => OK
No of words: 189.0 315.596192385 60% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38095238095 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70779275107 4.20363070211 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.73458029062 2.80592935109 133% => OK
Unique words: 102.0 176.041082164 58% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539682539683 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 304.2 506.74238477 60% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 16.0721442886 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 24.7312080793 49.4020404114 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 145.285714286 106.682146367 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.71428571429 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.11522567308 0.244688304435 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0657982503416 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0595649261553 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0871818010955 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0683736382278 0.056905535591 120% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 13.0946893788 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 78.4519038076 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 9.78957915832 163% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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