University should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics:

University should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Although our society is becoming more and more tolerant and modernised, cases of unequal treatment on the basis of gender still occur. For instance, it is widely believed that all the professions can be divided into two separate categories: male professions and jobs contingent only to female. This may cause unequal conditions for male and female in the educational sphere. The question of accepting equal numbers of men and women to the universities will be examined in this essay. This idea is sought to be the solution for eliminating discrimination on the grounds of sex. However, my point of view is completely different. I disagree that universities should exercise such a limitations, as it will lead to a lot of disadvantageous consequences.

First and foremost, it should be never forgotten that application to university is a serious, durable and laborious process, which has its own steps, requirements and, more importantly, certain eligibility criteria for applicants that may vary in different universities and majors. To my mind, for the acceptance criteria to be reasonable and objective it should never be based on gender, but personal qualities and capabilities of the applicant. Accepting new students by counting and limiting the number for a certain gender (even equally) may lead to discrimination. For instance, one man who has done a substantial work to boost his CV, his marks and intelligence to finally apply and become a student of Harvard will not be accepted only for the reason that according to the counting there needed to be a female applicant. Thus, imagine this student is not eligible because he is simply not a girl. This kind of approach will definitely hinder people who truly worth a place at university from gaining education where they were planning to. In my opinion, discrimination is apparent in this type of situation more than that when the number of girls accede the numbers of boys at the university.

Another unfavourable outcome that may happen is the decrease in competitiveness of young professionals in the labour market in the future. To be more precise, students, for example girls, too easily accepted to the faculty of law in order to equalise the number of male and female in this subject will not be motivated to work hard in the future, as they will tend to think that everything comes easily when you are a girl. This exaggerating feminist approach will only lead to failure to be accepted as a successful professional in one’s sphere and to prove that he or she is truly worthy. The real success of the result depends on the way it is achieved.

In conclusion, the attempts to artificially equalize the proportions of man and women in every university course are unreasonable, as they will not give a positive result on the promotion of equality and non-discrimination in education and will only lead to adverse effect.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 679, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a limitation' or simply 'limitations'?
Suggestion: a limitation; limitations
... that universities should exercise such a limitations, as it will lead to a lot of disadvanta...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, so, still, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 13.1623246493 190% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 21.0 10.4138276553 202% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 41.998997996 160% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2419.0 1615.20841683 150% => OK
No of words: 480.0 315.596192385 152% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03958333333 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.20363070211 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09668771858 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 176.041082164 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514583333333 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 792.9 506.74238477 156% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.610983543 49.4020404114 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.315789474 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2631578947 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.31578947368 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206402601393 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0611842139569 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0518575205912 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123121852564 0.151304729494 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0258723044667 0.056905535591 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 78.4519038076 163% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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