Thanks to modern technology development, cutting-edge phones have been becoming an effective subservience because of its set of merits. From my perspective, there are some potential downsides against its prospect, involving health-related issues and the lack of social interaction.
When it comes to the rapid innovation of technology, this factor makes a significant contribution to the community evolution which does not come into sight in the past. First, it shortens the geological obstacles, nowadays, the distance between transmitting conversation could be totally eliminated by making a phone call. For example, teenagers are able to interact online at all time to their mutual relationships no matter where, such as parents, friends or relatives. Second, this cutting-edge device also aid education, especially children. With the diversified resource of attractive information and helpful content, the youth have a closer approach to enrich and broaden their horizon of knowledge through academic performance. Particularly, immersing into wildlife documentaries gain a deeper understanding of the outside world.
In comparison with the advantages brought by smartphone, conspicuously, it exerts profoundly adverse impacts on both physical and nervous systems and the decelerating society relationship. According to scientific reports, youngsters are likely to live in an upward inclination of being addictive to abusing the cooperation of internet and smart devices. This leads to the sedentary lifestyle in term of avoiding sports activities and the unconsciousness of mental conditions resulting from the affecting electrical waves of smartphones. For example, the adolescent tends to spend 80% of their leisure time on recreational smart equipment have a chance to get the risk of obesity and diabetes. Moreover, without real dialogue between people instead of deceptive text, decreasing the intimate connection and reaching the bottom sense of loneliness, by the virtue of depression.
To conclude, although smartphone narrows the liaison of mankind, its drawbacks could not be impinged by the burgeoning of the technological industry.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: comparison,
...derstanding of the outside world. In comparison with the advantages brought by smartpho...
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Suggestion:
...neliness, by the virtue of depression. To conclude, although smartphone narrows...
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Suggestion:
...rgeoning of the technological industry.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, second, so, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1847.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 312.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.91987179487 5.12529762239 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.31958301753 2.80592935109 118% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.692307692308 0.561755894193 123% => OK
syllable_count: 571.5 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.6299554478 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.928571429 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2857142857 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57142857143 7.06120827912 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0532864664941 0.244688304435 22% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0159595131945 0.084324248473 19% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0231962417782 0.0667982634062 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0273289158782 0.151304729494 18% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0205238613858 0.056905535591 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 50.2224549098 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.35 12.4159519038 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.31 8.58950901804 132% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 78.4519038076 166% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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