Very few school children learn about the value of money and how to look after it, yet this is a critical life skill that should be taught as a part of the school curriculum. Do you agree or disagree?
A practical life skill, which plays an essential role in adulthood but is not taught at public school, is financial responsibility. On one hand, I am inclined to believe that as a child gains monetary knowledge and understands basic concepts of finance, he will make better decisions in terms of spending habits. On the other hand, hardly is such a subject appropriate for the age of adolescence.
To assess the potential advantage of being taught about the value of money, we must bring the skillsets of personal finance into focus. Assuming a child was educated about the valuable money of schooling and how much effort his or her parents had put in to earn that money, he or she would be better and have compassion toward everyone. Not only would that child, therefore, be good at saving up, but he or she could also manage to avoid wasting unnecessary purchases at all costs. In addition, youngsters can develop a good shopping habit and empathize with those who are struggling to cope with their tough life. Another benefit which might be obtained in the long run is an accumulated source of fund that may either be used for investment or donation.
Although so far, one can readily draw the conclusion that providing information regarding finances to school children is critical, we must put their puberty stage into perspective before judging whether it is a necessary school subject or not. Being mentally immature and having no exposure to the economic environment in real life, the pupils appear to be not ready for how money flows in society. For instance, since virtually all of the students have never been employed and paid any money apart from the amount that was given by parents, they will find the lesson,, as well as their home assignments, redundant at that moment. On top of that, because the number of hours that the students sit in the classroom is not infinite, other basic subjects such as mathematics, physics or chemistry both serve to lay the foundation for other advanced knowledge that they will face at university, like finances or economics and appeal strongly to children.
Taking both sides into consideration, they point me to the conclusion that in principle, showing schoolchildren how to manage their money can be useful for everyday life aspects, but in practice, academic institutions had better focus on other elementary subjects.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, regarding, so, therefore, well, apart from, for instance, in addition, such as, as well as, on the other hand, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1983.0 1615.20841683 123% => OK
No of words: 398.0 315.596192385 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9824120603 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7510130454 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 176.041082164 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603015075377 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 619.2 506.74238477 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.8416124427 49.4020404114 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.538461538 106.682146367 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.6153846154 20.7667163134 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.1538461538 7.06120827912 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177077416536 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0635389328009 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.054189851495 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102463933898 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0331031865349 0.056905535591 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 13.0946893788 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 50.2224549098 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.2 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.29 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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