Watching a live performance such as a play, concert, or sporting event is more enjoyable than watching the same event on television. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
It is believed that watching a performance such as a play, concert or sporting event directly might help audiences gain more excitement than watching a similar event broadcasted on TV. From my perspectives, I partly agree with this statement and I will give reasons to it below.
On the one hand, a large number of people choose to stay at home and watch a performance aired on TV primarily due to the ticket’s cost. The price of tickets are increasingly too exorbitant to afford, instead, they would like to stay at home, turn on television and watch that event in a convenient state. Furthermore, it will be completely difficult and impossible to travel if audiences live in faraway places, which means that geographical distamce and location can be considered to be a hindrance to those keen on participating in a stadium or a theatre to watch a performance directly. For example, my father used to expect to watch a live match between Viet Nam and Japan, but unfortunately, the stadium was in Nam Tu Liem district which is much farther than he supposed, as a result, he decided to quit this idea and watched through the screen of TV.
On the other hand, watching a live performance is absolutely a terrific experience that I am sure that no one wants to ignore for several reasons. First of all, watching a live performance can give people a sense of participation and interaction. The atmosphere of the stadium or the concert with full of amusement and interest can offer unforgettable feeling that nobody can understand on watching the similar one on TV. In those places, they can share their opinion and feeling with other audiences when a goal is scoured or the beat or vibe of a song provides. In addition, they can meet a chance of interacting with their ideal performers and show their appriciation which is really few and far between. For instance, one of my friend last year joined a Korean concert where he met his favourite singer named HyunA and he claimed that was by far the most splendid moment he had ever experienced. For this reason, I surely suppose that more than a number of people wish to watch live performances in the stadium or theatres.
In conclusion, people might find their contentment on performances broadcasted on TV. However, I recommend that they should attend those events in direct way in terms of excitement and experience.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 18, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
... reasons to it below. On the one hand, a large number of people choose to stay at home and watch...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, really, so, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 10.4138276553 202% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1963.0 1615.20841683 122% => OK
No of words: 409.0 315.596192385 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79951100244 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91786320275 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 176.041082164 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520782396088 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 613.8 506.74238477 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.96999196 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.866666667 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2666666667 20.7667163134 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5333333333 7.06120827912 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317334420528 0.244688304435 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108220574687 0.084324248473 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0919162164816 0.0667982634062 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212119279123 0.151304729494 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.130609176004 0.056905535591 230% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 50.2224549098 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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