The graph below shows the percentage of people in different age groups in one city who attended music concert between 2010 and 2015.
The line graph illustrates the percentage of people from various ages attending music concerts from 2010 to 2015 in a particular city.
In general, there was an increase in the attendance rate of individuals in almost age groups, with the exception of those from 55 to 64 between 2010 and 2015. In addition, these concerts attract the largest number of young adults under 24 to participate through the period.
In 2011, the proportion of people aged from 16 to 24 who joined music concerts started at 40%, after which it saw a gradual increase to about 62% in 2014 before ending the period at approximately 70%. A similar figure to those below 24 was reported to be the participation rate of people at the age of 45-54 in 2010, with a significant decrease to 30% in 2012, and a considerable rise to nearly 50% in 2015. About 52% was the attendance rate of citizens aged 25-44 in 2010, but from the year 2012 onwards, a fluctuation was witnessed in this figure which suddenly fell to 40% in 2012, but then went up slightly to about 53%.
The percentage of people in 55-64 age group participating in music concerts was 25%, which was nearly double higher than that of those above 75, at only 10%. A slight growth to around 30% in 2013 in was seen in the join rate of people aging from 55 to 64, but this figure marginally dropped to 20% two years later. Meanwhile, the proportion of attenders who were over 75 rose rapidly to 20% in 2012;however;this figure decreased again to 10% and remained unchanged till 2014, when the rate grew swiftly to 20% in the last year of the period. Nevertheless, this age group still ranked its final position throughout the period.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, nevertheless, still, then, while, in addition, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 33.7804878049 228% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 3.97073170732 227% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1372.0 965.302439024 142% => OK
No of words: 296.0 196.424390244 151% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63513513514 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 3.73543355544 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74290205574 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 106.607317073 149% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537162162162 0.547539520022 98% => OK
syllable_count: 393.3 283.868780488 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.482926829268 828% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 3.36585365854 238% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 32.0 22.4926829268 142% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 82.036577208 43.030603864 191% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.444444444 112.824112599 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.8888888889 22.9334400587 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 5.23603664747 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274603651607 0.215688989381 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128315921747 0.103423049105 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0922069415882 0.0843802449381 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203700447095 0.15604864568 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0845653830447 0.0819641961636 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.2329268293 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.38 61.2550243902 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 10.3012195122 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 11.4140731707 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 40.7170731707 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.9970731707 135% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.