The graph below shows the percentage of people in different age groups in one city who attended music concert between 2010 and 2015.
When it comes to the rate of people who attended a music concert in the age of 16 to 24, it started at 40% and thereafter swelled remarkably to 60% in 2012 and 2013 before soaring to its zenith of 70% in the last year.
Despite sharing a corresponding starting point, the rate of citizens going to the music concert in the age of 45 to 54 slumped to 30% in 2012. The latter half of the period, meanwhile, registered a significant proliferation to 49% in 2015.
In terms of the proportion of music concert-goers aged 25 to 44 that attended music concerts, it diminished considerably to its bottom of 40% from 52% in 2011 before bouncing back to its starting level in 2015.
Conversely, the percentage of citizens who attended the music concert at the age of over 75 fluctuated somewhere in the vicinity of 10% and 20% in the first 3 years and then recovered moderately to its initial peak in the last year.
25% of people in the age of 55 to 64 in the first year nudged up to 30% in the next year before moderating to nearly 20% in 2015.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...oncert in the age of 45 to 54 slumped to 30% in 2012. The latter half of the peri...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, first, if, so, then, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 0.0 7.0 0% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 33.7804878049 160% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 848.0 965.302439024 88% => OK
No of words: 195.0 196.424390244 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.34871794872 4.92477711251 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73687570622 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72194191421 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 98.0 106.607317073 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502564102564 0.547539520022 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 248.4 283.868780488 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 22.4926829268 142% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.0283145801 43.030603864 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.333333333 112.824112599 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.5 22.9334400587 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 5.23603664747 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242291655492 0.215688989381 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119918065434 0.103423049105 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0451505020762 0.0843802449381 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136895517064 0.15604864568 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.030338425385 0.0819641961636 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.2329268293 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.38 61.2550243902 105% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 10.3012195122 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.54 11.4140731707 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 40.7170731707 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.9970731707 135% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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